No one writes about
falling out of love
the drift - continental
masses edging apart
It takes less work to
watch than trying
to push two fractured
souls back together.
No one writes about that
No one writes about
losing your soul mate
one bickering argument
at at time - pieces
nibbled away until
only a shell remains.
No one writes about that
No one writes about
the slow loss, the
bleed, drip drip drip
as your dreams are
pushed aside and
you melt away
until nothing remains.
No one writes about that.
I really like this poem, I think it's dark and sad, and a real reflection of reality. But still very sad.
ReplyDeleteGah! I think this is my favourite that you've written so far. I love the simple truth repeated throughout that "no one writes about that." It's haunting, because not only do we not write about that, we don't talk about it either. I see this as a bit of a critique of the culture we have created for ourselves, its shallow and obsessed with the idea of "falling in love" as something that happens beyond one's control, but has no interest in the far more boring reality and struggle of what is means to chose to love. Love the line "bleed, drip drip drip" on so many levels.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I just noticed the second two stanzas end with "remains," first its a shell and then nothing. What if you added remains to the end of the first stanza as well to tie it together?
Thanks for sharing :)
Gah! I think this is my favourite that you've written so far. I love the simple truth repeated throughout that "no one writes about that." It's haunting, because not only do we not write about that, we don't talk about it either. I see this as a bit of a critique of the culture we have created for ourselves, its shallow and obsessed with the idea of "falling in love" as something that happens beyond one's control, but has no interest in the far more boring reality and struggle of what is means to chose to love. Love the line "bleed, drip drip drip" on so many levels.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I just noticed the second two stanzas end with "remains," first its a shell and then nothing. What if you added remains to the end of the first stanza as well to tie it together?
Thanks for sharing :)